English 101 Classification & Division-Based Peer Review Sheet
Writer’s Name & Title of Essay: Kate Lemond & Post High School, The D’s
Reader’s Name: Chelsea Adams
1. Is the introductory paragraph interesting? Why or why not? Does the introduction specify clearly what is to be classified and/or divided into groups?
I thought the paragraph was interesting, and yes it states that they are groups classifying people into what they did after high school.
2. Is there a clear thesis statement? Can you find a sentence (or two) that reveals the writer’s point or purpose for the classification and/or division? Type the sentence(s) below that you believe to be the writer’s thesis statement. If the thesis is implied, state it in your own words below.
“I have observed many of these paths my peers from high school have followed”.
3. Is the writer’s basis of classification clear (see “Notes on Classification and Division” posted June 2nd)? Why or why not? By what means is the writer grouping his or her subject matter?
Yes her basis of classification is what her peers did after high school. It was very easy to follow what she was talking about when she classified them into these groups. The subject matter is her peers, and they are in different groups based on what they did after high school.
4. Are the groups or categories clearly defined and uniquely named? Do any seem to overlap or appear oversimplified or based on stereotypes? Explain.
I think they were clearly named, and very creative. There weren’t any overlaps or stereotypes. I thought they were all very unique.
5. Would the essay improve if the paragraphs were arranged differently? Why/why not? Note any paragraph that seems out of order. Are the paragraphs connected to one another smoothly and logically? Are there transitions between paragraphs that help you understand how the writer’s ideas are connected? Explain.
The fourth paragraph down I think she meant for the military grouping to be a separated paragraph, but there needs to be an extra space to ensure the separation.
I would move the military classification as “The Disciplined” the paragraph under “The Determined”. It seemed that she was classifying them in descending order of their importance or achievements and being in the military definitely deserves to be up higher on the list. Other than that I thought the transitions were nice and the other paragraphs flowed.
6. Do individual paragraphs seem well detailed? What suggestions would you make about adding/subtracting specific examples to help illustrate the writer’s classification and/or division?
I thought the paragraphs were very detailed and thoroughly explained each characteristic of group. I think she has plenty of detail in all the groups, but adding more wouldn’t hurt.
7. Are all of the writer’s paragraphs unified and coherent? Indicate which paragraphs have any sentences that seem irrelevant (“unity” concerns) or out of order (“coherence” concerns).
I thought all the paragraphs were in the right order except for the one I mentioned above about the military classification. Everything else seems relevant and in the right place.
8. Go back and read the first and last paragraph. Has the writer fulfilled the obligations he or she established in the introduction? Does the writer accomplish everything promised in the introduction, or does the essay go off track or seem to switch focus? Why or why not? How can the conclusion be improved?
The writer fulfilled her obligations to explain every classification of her peers as the embarked on with their lives after high school. The essay stays on track and was a very enjoyable read. I think the conclusion could be improved by adding a little more detail, and maybe instead of talking about dirt, mowed, or making a new trail she could restate her classifications in the essay.
9. Now look at sentences. Does the writer have sentences that strike you as effective because they include strong verbs, specific details, memorable phrases, or striking images? Does the writer have any words they repeat too often, use incorrectly, or misspells? Finally, does the writer have any tendencies for error they should be made aware of? (Think comma splices, run-on sentences, or switches in verb tense, etc.)
I thought the sentences were very effective. They included strong verbs and images that I could envision what each category stood for. I didn’t come across any repetition, or misspelled words.
10. Write a summary comment that explains what you like best about the paper. Then, describe the two features of the paper that most need improvement. What suggestion(s) for overcoming these problems do you have?
I loved the tone of her essay, she uses kind of a sarcastic tone when talking about some of the classifications/groups and it really worked well. I really enjoyed reading it. I would improve the military classification and move it up next to the “Determined” group. I didn’t see anything else that was wrong with the essay.
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